My works...

PAGES - COLLECTIONS - ARTICLES - VIEWS

Jan 19, 2011

WHISPERS: Emptiness within...



Some Free Form Haiku for you to enjoy below…
To read more about Haiku Form of Poetry Writing, 
please check this feature... Click here

Cherry blossoms
Not because it has to
Because, it loves to
__

Silence hangs heavy
Winter pregnant with chilly winds
Forest prepares for a long night
__

Silence
Like the snow
Falls appropriately within my heart
__

EMPTINESS WITHIN…
_________

The night was slowly floating away
With the river outside
My thoughts continued down stream too
From past to the present
Into the future
Through my mental agony
Of not being with this ‘now’
Of not being with you

The darkness
Of not having enough courage
To love you
Again
Or hold your burning thoughts
In the chaos of my heart
Continued to haunt me
Through out the night
Through out the past
As slowly
River floated away
Into the oblivion of time
My memories
Crossed the present,
And now lies in ambush
Of future
As I slowly drift away
From you

The sterile time
Slowly carved you out
Out of my soul
Through a clean cesarian cut of ‘now’
A strange antiseptic emptiness
Fills my soul
In the spaces that you grew
From drops of love
Into a completeness
It tastes strange,
Feels strange
And holds me from inside
In strange sterile isolation
Of just being empty
Empty of you

Sounds of river fades
As night drifts apart too
Leaving the sunrise
To fill me with darkness of new dawn
Empty of you
____________
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya

Submitted to OneStopPoetry WK 31


Also Submitted to Jingle Poetry Potluck - Love Bonds and Relationships

54 comments:

  1. not having enough courage to love you again...mmm...like that...feel it...the sunrise to fill me with darkness as well...great one shot

    ReplyDelete
  2. Silence hangs heavy
    Winter pregnant with chilly winds
    Forest prepares for a long night

    So much suggested in such few words. As for "Emptiness Within" I'm finding connecting themes of night and birth in your poetry this week, as well as isolation and desolation. As always, expressed through beautiful poetry. Cheers, Shashi

    ReplyDelete
  3. The cherry blossom haiku is truly perfect and 'Emptiness' is wonderfully haunting.

    ReplyDelete
  4. your haiku is truly wonderful Shashi
    I was especially drawn to the Emptiness Within

    it is in emptiness of 'you' that we begin a path to fulfillment.

    it is a 'comforting' strange sterile isolation, indeed

    beautifully done
    thank you

    ReplyDelete
  5. Dear Sashi,
    "Emptiness Within" is a great poem, well crafted, lucid and palpable to the compassionate reader.

    "The pain of emptiness, like the sterility of Winter, becomes the soil that holds the promise of spring blossoms"

    Tiger Windwalker

    ReplyDelete
  6. Emptiness Within in its entirety is a literary oxymoron. The surface serenity of the words creating a calm pool under which chaos and longing erupt but not quite to the surface. The tension is buried - the effect a brilliant paradox. This is a strange and amazing work of art. Thank you. Gay @beachanny

    ReplyDelete
  7. beautiful heartfelt words expressing the emptiness within the heart ....lovely Shashi...bkm

    ReplyDelete
  8. Not enough courage to love again - yeah, I know that feeling, how much emptier can one get?

    Cherry blossoms
    Not because it has to
    Because, it loves to


    Love that!

    ReplyDelete
  9. oh i loved your cherry blossom haiku - not because it has to, because it loves to...says so much...

    ReplyDelete
  10. I enjoyed this post. Your haikus were wonderful as well as the photos. And I loved the emotion and longing in your poem, one I can relate to.

    ReplyDelete
  11. Very nice,Shashi. I always enjoy your haikus. I especially like the first, just "because it loves to." Charming.

    The poem is filled with such loss and longing. (sigh)

    Thank you for leaving a comment on my entry. I appreciate it.

    ReplyDelete
  12. All beautiful, stunning images... the last:

    Sounds of river fades
    As night drifts apart too
    Leaving the sunrise
    To fill me with darkness of new dawn
    Empty of you

    Fills one with serene thoughts of the stream, flowing gently, only to succomb to the darkness... Wow.

    ReplyDelete
  13. A splendid visual and sensory delight as ever, Shashi, and your haiku, as always, left me with tingles and inspirations. The first two in particular gave me great satisfaction:

    "Cherry blossoms
    Not because it has to
    Because, it loves to"

    It's a deep one. Its message, its image, is not all there right off. You have a cherry blossom, but there is so much more there, and it is beautiful as you plum its depths within yourself. And:

    "Silence hangs heavy
    Winter pregnant with chilly winds
    Forest prepares for a long night"

    Simply a stunning winter visual. I've felt it, and that probably why it rings so heavily with me. Standing in the woods at night, snow crunching, air heavy with prospective snow, wind blowing; close your eyes and draw it all in...I could taste it.

    Splendid, all! Quite serene.

    ReplyDelete
  14. I see what I've been missing. The haikus are beautiful and deep, the poem haunting. The cherry haiku show love and promise to the full. The poem, love is present and empty of the one you want. Well written.

    ReplyDelete
  15. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. "Cherry blossoms . . . " made my hear ache with longing for the cherry blossoms of Japan. Thank you so much for sharing, and for visiting my blog earlier.

    Lisa

    ReplyDelete
  16. Things done with love are beautiful -- like the cherry blossoms and your poems :)

    ReplyDelete
  17. refreshing flowers with lovely Haiku,
    dreamy water imagery with beautiful poem...

    love it.
    welcome in and Happy Valentine's Day.

    A++

    ReplyDelete
  18. Your haikus are beautiful. Such a sadness conveyed in your poem.

    ReplyDelete
  19. Lovely, lovely, lovely. Your poetic imagery brings forth such emotional response!

    ReplyDelete
  20. What a magical verse.. Thanks for sharing this!
    It talked of Life: birth n death, old dieing to transition to newness.. Something sad n yet tranquil..

    wonderful!!

    ReplyDelete
  21. This is my favorite:
    Cherry blossoms
    Not because it has to
    Because, it loves to

    It is just brilliant!!

    ReplyDelete
  22. Your haiku are exquisite and your poem had my emotions catching in my throat. I could feel your "emptiness within". Thank you, Shashi for sharing "you" so eloquently.

    ReplyDelete
  23. There's something sad and beautiful about this poem... The closing lines are just prefect!:
    'Sounds of river fades
    As night drifts apart too
    Leaving the sunrise
    To fill me with darkness of new dawn
    Empty of you'
    Love it!

    ReplyDelete
  24. Very visual use of language all the way around. Enjoyable read; thanks for sharing via Poetry Potluck.

    crb.

    ReplyDelete
  25. I love the saying about the cherries and why they blossom ... Nice post Shashi!

    ReplyDelete
  26. Can't believe I missed you for One Stop, Shashi. But I'm glad you posted this again for Jingle. The introductory haiku is stunning, especially the cherry blossom one. The River is getting to be quite a presence in your work; when I read it there I start to think of your other uses of it so the poem is that much richer. The last stanza is full of loss, but the River flows on.

    ReplyDelete
  27. Wow..wow..and again WOW!!!
    Your wordplay here is totally breathtakingly stunning, Shashi! I still cannot believe that I did not read this from One Stop! :( And my apologies for that!

    This poem is all about yearning, and the desire to reunite with our beloved... (Sigh)
    A sad tale... but your words made it so hauntingly beautiful!!

    You rock, S!!
    And you really inspire me with your amazing poetry!!! Thanks for everything, Shashi....

    ReplyDelete
  28. Wonderful, so much to read and take in...amazing work!

    ReplyDelete
  29. I am in love with this one:

    Cherry blossoms
    Not because it has to
    Because, it loves to

    ReplyDelete
  30. Well-expressed... certainly bring out every inch of emptiness within..

    Could relate to this part the best 'A strange antiseptic emptiness
    Fills my soul
    In the spaces that you grew
    From drops of love
    Into a completeness'...

    Oh yes, thanks for dropping by.. :) Hope to see you around more often.. :)

    S.Pike (Krislin)

    ReplyDelete
  31. Wow. Nothing I can say here can begin to cover my admiration. What an amazing poem. The imagery was so evocative! Brilliant!

    ReplyDelete
  32. Shashi, these are all stunning ... the haikus are delightful and "Emptyness Within" is stirring, memorable, exquisitely human. Thank you for a lovely experience.

    Just a reminder, Shashi, please join us at Thursday Poets Rally this week at the new site. We'd love to have you come out and play.
    http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.blogspot.com/

    I hope the sentiment expressed in the poem is just a story and that you passed a pleasant Valentine's Day.,

    Warmest regards,
    JamieDedes

    ReplyDelete
  33. Loved it :-) thanks for sharing !

    ReplyDelete
  34. Nice free form haiku...i particularly liked the line, "Winter pregnant with chilly winds."

    "Emptiness Within" is beautifully haunting and sad. I love the end and its contradiction of darkness at approach of dawn.

    ReplyDelete
  35. I love the Haikus, especially the first :)

    "Emptiness Within" is sad...I've always found emptiness to be more painful than pain.

    ReplyDelete
  36. I enjoyed them all but my fave was the second Haiku :) just beautifully crafted, thanks

    ReplyDelete
  37. Beautiful haiku. You always amuse me with vivid images in your poems like the image in the name of your blog. Happy potluck.

    ReplyDelete
  38. Love the Haikus and the poem. The Stanzas give it such impact. Deeply felt.

    ReplyDelete
  39. lovely lovely lovely- and thanks for always dropping by.. here's my potluck in case you want to read haha!.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/05/11/happily-tied/

    ReplyDelete
  40. I love those haikus!
    Thx for visiting me too.

    ReplyDelete
  41. I admire your skill with haikus. I love the story of cherry blossoms and in the mind's eye, the picture of them blowing in the wind has always brought me peace. "Emptiness Within" has a soul-deep sadness to it, but only when seen from a point of attachment. When one looks at it from the view of attaining true, inner peace, one can see that being "empty of you" could be a good thing, if the attachment has formerly brought pain. The thought also occurred to me that perhaps the "you" of whom you speak is the Divine, and in that case, separation would be painful. That river always flows...and I know how hard it can be to tame an unquiet mind. Thanks for the visit to my blog and thanks for the link to yours. :)

    ReplyDelete
  42. The first haiku was really wonderful and the rest were beautiful complement. Emptiness, such a depressing feeling.

    Bless!

    ReplyDelete
  43. Your poems are so beautiful! I adore the one about cherry blossoms. This is how haiku should be done! "The night was slowly floating away with the river outside..." Once I read that line in your Emptiness Within poem, I was hooked. Such lovely and sad imagery. I had tears in my eyes. Masterful!

    ReplyDelete
  44. Brilliant write. I am in awe with the raw emotive feel of "emptiness within"

    ReplyDelete
  45. What delightful and insightful reads! Thank you for sharing!

    ReplyDelete
  46. I would applaud your poetry but I do not want to break the speechless wonder I feel when I read your work. Truly beautiful. Thank you, too, for visiting me. Here is a poem on being in the Now which everyone talks about but rarely experience. Hugs, pat

    http://patcegan.wordpress.com/2011/02/14/the-present/

    ReplyDelete
  47. Hello, Thanks for the love to Poetry Potluck! You Rock!

    Awards 4 Poetry Potluck Week 22, Enjoy!

    Your contribution means a world to us, Happy Thursday!
    See you next time!
    xoxox

    ReplyDelete
  48. Yours Haikus are very expressive...
    Emptiness is an ache that increases with time...better to be alone or be lonely...a difficult choice to make...very melancholic.

    ReplyDelete
  49. Very expressive indeed, haiku sounds a really interesting form. Lovely!

    ReplyDelete
  50. hollowness within & in the air we breathe in &
    sometimes it becomes so thick that nearly chokes
    very nice lines
    loved them
    would keep coming back for more

    ReplyDelete
  51. Love the line about not having the courage to love again. These were so melancholic, just lovely.

    ReplyDelete

I appreciate your visit and it will be a great pleasure to know what you think of this post...