Om Namah Shivaya

Om Namah Shivaya

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May 10, 2010

Poetry - Stuck in the cycle of life

Anchored in Karma,
Chained to the past
Life tries to break free
From darkness that is lost

Among memories that were forgotten
Among things that were not done
Among friends that were not made
Among roads that were not ...taken
Among choices that were made
And choices that were not.
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30 comments:

  1. REally nice poem

    thanks mausaji to make me read this

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  2. very powerful piece,
    the image is so intense...
    well done!

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  3. Thanks for the participation,
    Visiting 18 participants is the requirement...
    Take your time, have fun!
    Let me know after you are done!

    Happy Thursday!

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  4. I rally like this Shashi.
    ..the wheel follows the hoof

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  5. Your poem is not unlike mine yet is could also be considered the opposite...mine defines life as moments of chance...yours tells me that fate is inflexible.
    Thank you for your comment on my poem...I am anxious to enjoy more of your work:-)

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  6. Thanks Jingle,
    @Woih : Yes I agree with you....

    @ Susan, yes you are write... mine is about life's frustration and its own accompanying dilemmas... thanks for reading and if you like in my whisper's section you will find many verses...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  7. That picture is the first draw, your poem ties in so well with it. The were nots are what can drag you down. Beautifully stated.

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  8. Shashi,
    This one is an absolute one- short and yet Intense. The image reminded me of old womenfolk in Calcutta village. They didn't blouses- maybe are changing now.. Great read.. Be around..
    Happy Rally

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  9. this one feels very meditative to me; it has to be read with thought. thanks for sharing.

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  10. You left me with a lot to think about here. Always a sign of great work!

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  11. Wonderfully written =D~We are all stuck within the cycle in a way ;D~

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  12. Very nice and true.

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  13. Note fate maybe, just reaction following action ... powerful piece, especially with the inclusion of the photograph. It's actually quite riviting.

    Thanks!

    Happy Rally days ...

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  14. @Frayedges: Yes, Knots can drag you down... hence I believe in removing the knots through meditation.
    @Oliviabiopiclog: Thanks for appreciating this one...
    @Arspoetica: This poetry is kind of my shadow dancing with mind... which keeps happening all the time within me... thanks for liking it. Its ofcourse meditative for me when ever I read this again...
    @Kirsten: Thanks and I am happy that it gave you food for thought... it does that to me always... whenever I read it...
    @Riikainfinityy: Thanks, for enjoying this.. we are stuck in life with our own individual karmic baggages...
    @Lizbethsgardeen: Thanks for your appreciation

    @Musingbymoonlight: I would rather call it Karmic Baggage and unloading of the same... We, Hindu's do believe in re-incarnation and I do too..
    As many of you liked the picture so much I thought of giving the back ground to the picture...
    The picture I took at Puri, the world famous temple town in Orissa of Lord Jagganath (Krishna) (The town is famous for its Chariot tour once a year). This lady was sitting behind the temple in front of a shop lost deep in her own thoughts...
    @Olivia, the state of Orissa is near to Kolkata too and yes you are right, the old women do discard the blouses for the comfort of it...
    Thanks for liking the picture as well as the verse...

    Ofcourse will be around as I am enjoying it...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  15. This is an great piece of brilliant work.. From darkness that is lost.. Shashi, this is the best.. First time here,loved it.. totally..

    Happy Rally...

    Rhyming Waters

    --Someone Is Special--

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  16. The repetition of "among" reminded me of a prayer. So tender, so sad...

    I am grateful for your words and grateful for your comment on my Rally poem, too.

    THANK YOU!

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  17. @SIS:Thanks Some one special and you made it special for me too..

    @Julie: I am glad that you liked it...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  18. i love the way you gave a a gap on the line "road that were not....taken"

    a truthful and poem of facts.

    thanks for sharing :)

    it touched my heart and i loved it :D

    I'm nominating you for "PERFECT POET" award :D

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  19. Dear Harshika, thanks for your appreciation and also for your nomination... I am glad that you noticed and liked the gap ... it meant a lot to me too...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  20. I appreciate poems like these that use simple language to describe complex feelings. Sometimes there is no need for long elaborate words. ^^

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  21. Thanks for the Nomination for "Perfect Poet Award" in the Rally, Harshika.

    I got the message today that I have had got it... thanks once again..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  22. Thanks Marisol. I agree with you that you dont need complex words to describe simple things in life... like love and feelings... These are actually very simple things but we, with our own ego's, assumptions and expectations, make it very complex and when things get out of hand, we use elaborate language to describe them in order to satisfy again our ego that we are fighting or saying big things... etc...
    Simply said is the shortest distance from heart to heart... that is the reason I love Haiku's and write short verses....
    Thanks for appreciating. I value your comments...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  23. Decisions, decisions...
    if the darkness wasn't lost,
    I'd be the light of my own life.

    Cheers to your future, Shashi!
    Peace, Uncle Tree

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  24. WOW Shashi. Come on really. First two lines are poetic gold. Love and Light, Sender

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  25. visit poets you did not originally reach in the Rally, have fun.
    I enjoyed your participation.
    Happy monday!

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  26. wow, very powerful in a sense i felt that it read like a warning to my own life - to break free from the mundane lifestyle.

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  27. @Watson
    @Senderupwords
    @Jingle
    @Donusho Thanks all
    I am sorry I missed these great message...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  28. Love the lines....... So true...:)

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