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Feb 22, 2011

WHISPERS: Fragility of eternal love... and Tanka

Fragility of Eternal love
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In colored strips of life,
I am catching shadows
Of your love
A thin line of sun rays
Filtering through the cracks
Of living
Caught within my palms
Form golden rings
Just like your fingers do

Your every curve
Smooth skin and touch
Molds my being into yours
I love the way
My body behaves
When I am with you
Shadow dancing with senses;
Drum beats of passion

With every sunrise, I catch
Burst of your beauty
Wetness of your lingering kiss
Scent of your smile
Entangled in a crumpled bed sheet
I feel, I just got here, to stay forever
To be the strength in me;
Be the fragility of eternal love
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Tanka
I have really enjoyed the form description of TANKA that Lady Nyo at One Stop Poetry posted (Click here to read more and add your own) The feature enthused me enough to write these two Tanka and hope you would like them. The images are from a village near Varanasi - World's oldest living city


Mist caress softly
Seeding, Mustard plant in bloom
Dew drops; Sweat flowers
In passions of morning sun
Wake up in my arm, my love
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Chilly winds, Lonely
Paths of life, Water discarded
Under cut and wounded bridge
A life in progress, of past and future
Present lives in your love; still.
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ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya


Submitted to One Shot Wednesday WK 34
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48 comments:

  1. Hello Shashi!

    Thank you for the praise! LOL! It was a lot of fun to write for Oneshot on tanka, but then again it was even more fun to read the tanka that poets there came up with.


    Mist caress softly
    Seeding, Mustard plant in bloom
    Dew drops; Sweat flowers
    In passions of morning sun
    Wake up in my arm, my love

    This is ethereal and lovely. And true to form.

    It sounds rather classical, but that is no mean task.

    Very nice, Shashi.

    Lady Nyo

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  2. I Love!!!them both Sashi...sweat flowers of passion and the bridging of past, present and future....truly lovely....bkm

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  3. I agree, many kudos to Lady Nyo for explaining the form so painstakingly and giving so many fascinating examples.

    Your photographs are breathtaking, especially the second and so is the tanka you have crafted to go with it. the '...cut and wounded bridge.." is an image that is almost primal and the last line is both sad and full of patience and endurance.

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  4. I agree, Lady Nyo did a wonderful job of describing the true essence of a tanka. I enjoyed your imagery, both in words and photos.

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  5. oh i love that first one, transitioning from nature to intimacy...being a fan of both... smiles.

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  6. both are beautiful, paired with stunning images. Well done.

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  7. Amazing...the pictures are heavenly...
    And your work is superb...
    "mist caress softly"
    "wounded bridge"....I love it :)

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  8. Wonderful. So gentle and soothing. Beautiful word choice. Lovely.

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  9. Thank you friends... for appreciating and loving these Tanka...
    @Asobime
    I know its a great feeling to write what's one passionate about and your passion on the form shows up in your write up and that is why its so good...
    I did not mean to write a classic one, but you had coached me so well on the form nothing else I could come up with... ;-_
    Thanks for liking this ....


    @bkm Thanks for liking this one... the moments of time, past present and future has been a recurring theme for me for sometime now.. :-)

    @hedgewitch
    These photographs I took in a village near Varanasi..I was staying for a day for a ritual. The nature and the fields were so beautiful and fresh there... Thanks for liking them as well as the Tanka.. The Cut tree across the small canal as a foot over bridge stood out among the so fresh and living surroundings...

    @RMP
    Oh Yes, Lady Nyo has done a great job... and thanks for liking my Tanka...

    @Brian Miller
    Thanks for liking the Tanka... and yes, I usually try to get down to emotions and feelings from life... I am glad that you enjoyed these...

    @Reflections
    Thanks for liking it ...

    @Sumit Sarkar
    Thanks for loving these...

    @emmettwheatfall.com
    Thanks for enjoying these...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  10. Just loved this line "A life in progress, of past and future"

    A very poignant composition, almost lyrical.

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  11. Thanks Purba for liking this..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  12. the fragility of eternal love...the scent of your smile...these are lovely lines shashi...really like that first poem...

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  13. Goodness! No haiku this time around hm? But you've left us such lovely tanka in their wake I see...

    That first piece was a treasure. You've taken the romantic and put it in nature, but not only that - you've used nature to coax out the feeling, to heighten and illustrate the emotion and the connection. Beautifully done.

    As for the tanka - a thorough delight. Love the transition of the first from nature into love's arms once more; and to the second, a stark portrait of life, yet brimming with that undercurrent of hope.

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  14. Shashi, you have outdone yourself. "I love the way my body behaves..." Very cool lines!! Also "I feel i just got here to stay forever." Thanks for the awesome poem!

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  15. Beautiful... The words float in the air and soothe the ears...

    Looks like you had a very good time in Varanasi...

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  16. Life is indeed a progression. Great words.

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  17. 'In colored strips of life,
    I am catching shadows
    Of your love
    A thin line of sun rays
    Filtering through the cracks
    Of living'

    So, so beautiful!

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  18. You were smooth with words here, this was brilliant

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  19. the fragility of eternal love...the sensuality and warmth in this poem is just overwhelming...beautiful

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  20. Really lovely, every single word a caress. The photos are beautiful and the perfect accompaniment.

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  21. Shasi, all three pieces are lovely.
    I felt the love in "the fragility of eternal love"
    a fantastic piece.

    Pamela

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  22. Sensual and sensuous words, Shashi!
    (And I know you know the difference)

    Another One Shot to make the ladies swoon!

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  23. Visiting your blog is always a veritable feast on the eyes and the souls Shashi, sensuous wonderous and awe inspiring artwork make for a great one shot, oh I'm swooning!

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  24. Sensual and sensuous, indeed! Reminds me of how it feels to be around my husband, actually. A fine thing. Wondrous imagery.

    Like the tanka, also. An interesting short structure.

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  25. love, love, love.. and sex. All you need, right ;-)

    Luke @ WordSalad

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  26. @Brian Miller
    Thanks for revisiting this page and liking those lines...

    @cianphelan
    I had to change that into Tanka, did not want to over dose readers with Japanese classical form...;-) Thanks for liking them. I am glad that you enjoyed the verse too.

    @azfree
    I am glad that you liked those words there...
    Thanks

    @Arti
    Thanks for enjoying my words there and floating with it. Oh yes I had a great time in Varanasi, will be sharing some images shortly...

    @anthonynorth
    Thank mate... for appreciation...

    @Old Ollie
    Thanks Ollie for appreciating

    @Susannah
    I am glad that you liked it...

    @Kodjo Deynoo
    Thanks

    @Claudia
    Sometimes I wonder, when there is true love, its more fragile...

    @ Diana Lee
    Thanks for appreciating those images and verses... and enjoying those words as actually there were said... a caress

    @flaubert
    Thanks for liking all three pieces. Oh yes there was love in those pieces...

    @Eric 'Bubba' Alder
    Oh yes, you are right, I know the difference..
    and thanks.. I am not sure though if this will make ladies swoon... ;-)

    @repressedsoul
    Thank you very much for your great words of appreciation...and thanks for proving Eric right and removing any doubts that i have had... ;-)

    @Joanne
    thanks for your beautiful words and relating to the verse and Tanka..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  27. Hi Luke...
    Is there anything else, ;-)

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  28. delicious...fragrant...words that invite all the senses to awaken. Beautiful Shashi, just beautiful.

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  29. Thanks LauraX

    I am happy that you liked it..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  30. Am I the only one to comment on the "Shadow Dancing" with the senses line? love it, Shashi, thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.

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  31. Oh Yes, you are the only one... thanks for liking this line as its close to my heart (Check the name of my blog..;-))as well as the verse...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  32. I do like it but I also mentioned it because I recognized it as the phrase in your blog's title. :) You are a joy, Shashi. Keep up the beautiful poetry writing, please.

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  33. Loved the Tanka for sure!

    Envious of the images you have put up.. 1 because you have shot them beautifully 2 because you got to see them with your naked eyes!!

    That's a mustard flower- isn't it? I have grown them a plenty times!

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  34. To be the strength in me;
    Be the fragility of eternal love

    These are my favourite lines.
    I love the Tanka's, both of them.

    How you talk about the one time tree now a bridge being A life in progress, of past and future. Atleast that's how I interpreted it.

    Lovely!
    Padmavani

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  35. Your poem was a sensuous delight, Shashi... I like how you play with a different shadow in each poem... I always look forward to reading more and more about those different shadows... and today's was a really beautiful and love-filled one!!
    A superb one shot, my friend..

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  36. @Shewriting
    I am happy that you enjoy my joy and passion too... I love writing about love, life and longing...

    @Olivia
    Thanks Olivia for liking the same...
    It was a great pleasure to spend some time with raw nature in the country side, where there no tap water, not much electricity and no net connectivity... (well I enjoyed not being online ... ;-))I love taking photographs, most of the images on my blog are taken by me. Oh yes, it was a pleasure to feel, touch and smell them. At this time of the year, fields of mustard plants were making the earth adorned with gold..

    @Padmavani
    Thanks for liking this one and those lines are my favorite too. For sometime now I am realizing that more deep, strong and eternal love is, the more fragile it becomes just like the taut string of Guitar, firm, tight, bound with strength, manifesting music also breaks easily... with just the right amount of plucking...
    Well that is one way, right way too, of looking at the tree bridge... how about a bridge across past that is flowing, from past to future...?
    There is your food for thought...
    thanks for liking it...

    @kavisionz
    Thanks for liking it and enjoying it. I am also noticing how the Shadows and rivers and sunsets and see has been after my thoughts... ;-) Next time I will write about a different shadow thinking about our conversation..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  37. Full of love and love soothes the heart...very nice reads.

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  38. These are really good! The poem is very sensual...I'm dripping. Very nice to read.

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  39. love, nature, intimacy, Varanasi all close to heart. loved them all. :)

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  40. Three beautiful love poems. All three deserve lingering over, savoring and enjoying. Excellent!

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  41. @Reggie
    Thanks, I am happy that you liked reading it...

    @kolembo
    thanks for liking this one...

    @Celestial Dreamz
    I love nature too, and i am surprised that you like varanasi... coming from south India, how come? Usually South Indians are not so upbeat about North India. By the way I am in Chennai though I belong to Kushinagar in UP.
    thanks for liking all ...

    @Glynn
    I am happy that you enjoyed these so much..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  42. These have been a welcome respite in a busy day. Beautiful :-)

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  43. Sashi, these images--in words and photos--have transported me to another (exquisite) world. You are a poet par excellence. Will investigate the tanka.

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  44. @Lucy Fur Leaps
    I am glad that these words have given you some happiness....

    @liv2write2day
    I am thrilled that you consider me a poet and at that a 'poet par excellence. I am grateful too... thanks.

    Tanka is a great form of poetry and Lady Nyo has done a marvelous job in making it more accessible, have a look...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  45. LOVE LOVE LOVE!
    The words and images in your post are gorgeous.
    Thanks for sharing your talents with us.
    Much love and light to you, Shashi.
    ~xo

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  46. Wetness of your lingering kiss
    Scent of your smile ~

    Present lives in your love; still. ~

    you helped me travel back in memory and stay there for a while

    Sarath Unnithan
    http://mindwaves.posterous.com

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