Om Namah Shivaya

Om Namah Shivaya

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Dec 9, 2010

WHISPERS: Clouds in the Attic

Some Free Form of Haiku's on Rain
Deep forest shakes off its age
Dances with breeze, in fresh green trees
Rain drum beats, cloud gives thunderous clap
The pregnant clouds, sweeping down
From the mountain peaks
Forest braces for re-birth
Dark clouds have rained and gone
You smile, in burst of rainbow
In deluge of pain, I smile too
This poetry is one of the collections of poetry I am writing, called “Kalina” about a small girl and her world, her feelings her thoughts. ‘Clouds in the Attic’ was submitted along with 'Butterfly' to ‘One Stop Poetry’ for the competition “Through a Child’s Eyes”. The poem "Butterfly' was selected as one of the finalist. Click here to read to read the article…
Clouds in the attic

As she walked ahead
In her enthusiastic little hop, skip and jump - steps
I fell behind, in my own thoughts; old and aging
Yet keeping pace with her fresh world
That turns in, with a burst of rainbow
On every turn, flying like a butterfly
Across her little universe of wonder

Now she stops; the deep forest
Climbing up the steep incline of the mountain
Has her attention; complete with one hand under her chin
And I know, she knows what to ask,
With a sweet little smile behind her knit wool gloved little hand
And stump me with her wide charmed eyes

“Why those clouds are leaving the mountain alone?
Do you think Grandpa, Peakoo* will be happy without them to play?
Do you think they are coming over to play with us?
Can you give your extra blanket to put them up, in the attic for the night?
Grandpa, it’s very cold now, you know, they will shiver

Before I could think an answer and say,
“Kalina, lets go now, it’s going to rain”
She has already moved on
Playing with the soft cold breeze, moving up from the valley

With her hands out stretched, running, almost flying
Like the autumn leaves, that joined in to play, in her wake
 ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya

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  1. beautiful! what a magical post, glad I stopped by.

  2. your poetry is always nature oriented and super cute.
    keep it up.


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  4. Oh Sashi, these haikus, and poem are so beautiful. Really, I get lost within them. Thank you.

  5. These are wonderful indeed. Love and Light, Sender

  6. A child's innocence is something we can never match! I really wonder why..
    What a refreshing read, Shashi...
    But reading the word 'wake' in the end gave me quite a jolt... cuz I had so happily pictured a little girl dancing about, running gleefully... I so wish that darkness didn't befall upon here..

    What a beautiful one shot, my friend... kudos!

  7. Oh you are a master at this kind of writing, blending nature, human nature, spiritual. I loved the haiku, especially the forest dancing to rain drums, thunder applauding. And then, Clouds in the attic - what an awesome title and beautiful poem. Sweet child to want to put up clouds under a blanket in the attic so they won't be too cold.

  8. hi shashi...just come across this whilst doing the one stop rounds...this is beautiful..cheers pete

  9. Beautiful images, creative inquisitive thoughts... wonderful

  10. Just Beautiful!Your words always have a certain warmth in it.Feel the beauty of nature as I read on.

    Both are very godd works.Particularly love the second one.So lovely!

  11. Love the way the hiaku sequence and the prose reflect off each other

    really nice form

    Thanks my dear friend for sharing your talent with One Shot - we are honored

  12. hi shashi-- lovely as ever-- you have such a generous heart and your openness to the world is a huge inspiration. xj

  13. like your haikus on rain in particular. Well-penned my friend. Always an interesting journey visiting Shashi's blog!


    Luke @ WordSalad (for OSW)

  14. The middle haiku is exceptionally vivid Shashi, and your little girl the essence of childhood, with her compassion for the clouds. Also the photograph at the top--almost too green to be real--matches your subject perfectly. Always a pleasure to come by here.

  15. You captured a child's inherent sense of play so beautifully. This is wonderful!

  16. Nice One Shot, Shashi.
    ("pregnant clouds" is a great description!)

  17. Shashi, "Clouds in the attic" is a wonderful poem. You capture the interaction and expression of a child very well. Great innocence shown through the child wanting to warm the clouds. Great poetry. I also enjoyed the stanzas in "Some Free Form of Haiku's on Rain" rain very much. Cheers.

  18. Shashi,
    I always find peace when I visit your site.
    Thank You!

  19. Beautiful images, Shashi

    My One Shot:

  20. I read the haiku batch - indelible image work here, my friend.

    Didn't read the second poem because each poet gets one poem (haiku/tanka are excepted) read by me per week. . . my schedule is crazed. (To read anymore deprives another poet of a read - maybe commented on - poem.)

  21. To remember innocence is a joy.

  22. A lovely and true take on a child's mindseye.

    I like the intertwining of the imagery.

    Lady Nyo

  23. Thanks every one, please check my new posting about my trip to Rishikesh through "Gateway Buddha - A spiritual journey through Rishikesh" with some interesting images again...

    Om Namah Shivaya


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